Lullaby

as the stars descent upon the dark sky

a lullaby can be heard

let the deliciously warmed milk

put you to sleep

and its scent put you to ease

with her gentle hand patting your soft hair

may you fall asleep with mother’s care.

p.s

a poem written by my 13 year old daughter. what do you guys think? let me know.

26 Comments

  1. Sabiscuit says:

    It is a very sweet lullaby. I hope she’ll get to sing it to her children, someday.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks..she loved what you said..

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  2. Kevin says:

    Very good. I’m impressed.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks a lot kevin..

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      1. Kevin says:

        You’re very welcome.

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  3. hooklineandinkwell says:

    this is very good coming from a thirteen year old…it is a joy to see poets blossom so early…well-done

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks so much…its really a joy to actually get to see your own child so passionate about the same thing as you are…I am very happy..

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      1. hooklineandinkwell says:

        Yes, I can tell that you are beaming…I am not a parent but I was a child and it was always uplifting and encouraging to see my parents smile and applaud when I did something well…cheers!!

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      2. michnavs says:

        I am indeed very proud…

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      3. hooklineandinkwell says:

        🙂

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  4. BunKaryudo says:

    That’s very good. My poems at her age usually began “roses are red, violets are blue” and then added with a stupid joke in the next two lines. Not exactly sophisticated, I’m afraid. 🙂

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  5. Saloni says:

    Very advanced for someone her age. It’s beautiful!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks a bunch for dropping by

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      1. Saloni says:

        It was my pleasure! Thanks for the follow 🙂 It brought me to your blog.

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  6. secretangel says:

    Absolutely beautiful!!! Definitely beyond a 13 year old!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks..It’s a joy to know you like it

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      1. secretangel says:

        God bless you!

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  7. awe… I love this sweet poem! 🙂 ♥ ❤

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks a lot for your kind words

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  8. xaranahara says:

    Wow. She is a wonderful poet already.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks…..she’s actually smiling right now reading your comment

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      1. xaranahara says:

        Awaw. The young lass should write more.

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  9. Léa says:

    A budding poet! Well done.

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  10. Very endearing. Thanks for following my blog, I appreciate your support.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you too..

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