Details in the Fabric

I

see you

I felt you

as I move fast

the downtown alley

your beautiful I know

the scent of you smell hunts me

everywhere I go you are there

I feel you in all of my senses

you’re just like a detail in the fabric

gone

as worn

drenched when soaked

tattered in time

broken in pieces

drained where the water flows

forgotten in time you go

remembered once but never twice

held once more felt over smelled again

for you are a detail in the fabric.

 

 

P.S.

Double etheree this time.

In response to the November Notes Writing Challenge hosted by Sarah Doughty of Heartstring Eulogies and Rosema of areadingwriter.❤

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20 Comments

    1. michnavs says:

      thanks Christy .. great to see you..

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  1. sheldonk2014 says:

    The scent of your smell hurts me
    I love that line
    As always Sheldon

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks…your comments are really appreciated..

      Like

  2. Miriam says:

    Love it Mich. Great feeling throughout.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks so mirriam

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  3. maria says:

    “remembered once but never twice” ~ this is great! Another heartbreaking piece. </3 🙂

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    1. michnavs says:

      Truely heartbreaking…thank you for stoppin by

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      1. maria says:

        It is. </3 I'm afraid we'll turn into masochist for loving heartbreaking poems like this one. ^^

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  4. rosemawrites says:

    “remembered once but never twice”

    oooh. oh Mich! this is such an emotive take…. soooo good!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks Rose..i am smiling…i am also happy i made my first wordpress challenge..

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      1. rosemawrites says:

        awwwww. glad to know that!! looking forward to more! ❤

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  5. inkyfire says:

    the scent of you smell hunts me
    everywhere i go you are there
    i feel you in all of my senses
    your just like a detail in the fabric
    .
    i loved this part… beautiful … !! 🙂 🙂 🙂

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you..great to know you like it…

      It is painfully beautiful indeed.

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  6. Davy D says:

    An excellent poem Mich. I love the contrast of the capitalised I and lower case I as the poem progresses. It adds to the pain.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks..i am enjoying this whole challenge…

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  7. mandibelle16 says:

    Beautiful piece. I love the description of his memory like torn fabric!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks..glad you like it that way

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