Indifference -poem

Indifference

I am an empty hand,
Reaching helplessly to hold another.

I am the sand tossed by the sea,
Nothing and bare naked.

He was my rock,
Torn by his apathy.

 

 

39 Comments

  1. Beautifully penned, I love the line about the sand! 🙂

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks Jenna☺☺

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      1. Yw welcome 😊 ❤️

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  2. Gina says:

    i may interpret it wrong but it feels like when we throw ourselves completely into some thing others don’t feel the same and their indifference can affect our mental stability. a very multi layered poem Mich that has many thoughts spinning in my head. brilliant!

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    1. michnavs says:

      That is correct Gina. And as always thank you for sharing your insights here. It added depth to the poem..

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  3. blindzanygirl says:

    “He was my Rock torn by his apathy.” That line speaks reams. I love this poem.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Oh thank you..i am happy you love it..

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  4. ivor20 says:

    Beautifully done, and your early line, “I am an empty hand,” contains so many layers and extended possibilities….

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks Ivor..yes the first line can be interpreted in so many ways…depending on how it affects the reader..

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      1. ivor20 says:

        That makes it a great line

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  5. Diana Tyler (la muse excentrique) ☕ says:

    This was beautifully expressed. I especially love the line about the sand.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you Di..☺

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      1. Diana Tyler (la muse excentrique) ☕ says:

        You’re welcome!

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  6. Hélène Vaillant says:

    Mich, your poem has multi-layers of meaning, my imagination does centre on the loneliness of being forgotten. Does that makes sense? The feelings in your words are almost tangible.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you Helene..yes it could also mean that way ..☺

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  7. So much in so few words, Mich!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Yes Rose….sometimes you dont need so many words…

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  8. calmkate says:

    yes layers of depth and emotion here, love it Mich 🙂

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks Kate😉

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      1. calmkate says:

        my pleasure 🙂

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  9. maria says:

    This piece urges one to think and contemplate. Now I want to see the sea. 🙂

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    1. michnavs says:

      I am glad it affect you that way …now go and contemplate..lol..

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  10. A thought provoking write- well done!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thanks so much..

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  11. murisopsis says:

    This is so tinged with loss of opportunity that it borders on melancholy. If that was your intention you certainly nailed it!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Yay to that☺

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  12. The vulnerability you’ve expressed here tears at my heart. Loneliness and rejection are all too palpable. Beautiful, Mich. 🌹

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  13. Bernie Delaney says:

    “I am an empty hand,
    Reaching helplessly to hold another”
    This really touches me. Thank you for this beautiful poem.

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you too for dropping by

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  14. Nirant Gurav says:

    Beautifully penned dear

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      1. Nirant Gurav says:

        Pleasure always for beautiful stuff mate

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