Can You Hear It?

Can You Hear It?



can you hear the pitter-patter sounds
the rapid beats and taps of the ceiling
the mysterious progression as it expounds
into echoes of gunshots swiftly firing?


can you feel as it rumbles the ground
the fleet-footed batter pounding blow
the reverberating blast of noise around
underneath the clamor of the meadow?


can you see how strong and powerful it is
the never-ending sobbing and throbbing
the murmurs and mumbles that never cease
carefully, gently, slowly, and gradually hiding?


no. really? you don't hear a thing, my dear?
oh, maybe it's just my heart wishing you were here.


for David's Weekly Prompt, 

I used prompt no.2 Option #2: Write a Shakespearean Sonnet using iambic pentameter (mine is with some modifications.)
https://skepticskaddish.com/2022/10/12/w3-prompt-24-weave-written-weekly

21 Comments

  1. Sadje says:

    Beautifully ended my friend

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you so much Sadje..

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re most welcome

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  2. Sunra Rainz says:

    Really like the twist at the end! Enjoyed all the sounds in this poem 🙂

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    1. michnavs says:

      Yay, i am so glad you enjoyed this…💕thank you

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  3. murisopsis says:

    Mich I was wondering and then the ending and POW! it all became clear! Loved this one!!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Yay,…i am so glad you love this one Val..💕💕💕

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  4. Beautiful and sweet ending! 🙂
    (((HUGS))) ❤️

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you so much Carolyn…

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  5. Sweet ending! I enjoyed all the auditory imagery, too!

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you so much..💕💕

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  6. lesleyscoble says:

    A beautiful sonnet.
    (I can hear rain and thunder in it)
    Thank you 🙏 🪶🌹

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    1. michnavs says:

      Aww thank you so much..

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  7. longing becomes you here and is so lovely for the prompt Mich❣️

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    1. michnavs says:

      Thank you dearly Cindy😊

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      1. Indeed my friend❣️

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  8. Hi, Mich ❤

    I just wanna let you know that this week's W3 prompt, hosted by the lovely Sunra Rainz, is now live:

    https://skepticskaddish.com/2022/10/19/w3-prompt-25-weave-written-weekly/

    Enjoy 🙂

    ~David

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    1. michnavs says:

      Heading over David

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